This
week at The Writer’s Block, I’m posting the final part of my original short
story “The Teeth.” If you missed parts 1 & 2, just scroll down and catch up
before reading the finale. I hope you enjoy, and thanks for visiting my blog.
AN
“She was asking for my help Lou.” Max
said again, this time she sounded frightened. “I know it was just a dream but
it started to feel prophetic, as if the dream returned just so I could help her.”
Max looked at Lou and waited for her friend to wonder out loud if she were
insane -or worse, laugh at her, believing that Max had lost her mind.
Lou did anything but; for the first
time since they sat down, she set aside her food and gave her friend a big hug.
Lou was the only person who knew about this dream, and how much Max feared its return.
Regardless of why the dream was back, Lou wanted to be supportive -laughing or
doubting her friends’ sanity was the furthest thing from her mind.
Max choked back some tears, she
hated to cry -never thought anything good ever came of it. She was grateful to
Lou however, and showed her appreciation in the only way she knew how, by
giving Lou her nachos.
“Night after night I would hear him
come home, and then he would leave with that ugly bag -fuller than it was before. Every time
I spied on this guy through my window, I felt like that nosey neighbor on
“Bewitched,” you know the one, Mrs. Kravitz, who always saw Samantha do
something witchy, but by the time she called her husband, everything would
magically go back to normal. It would be just my luck that this whole late
night drama was nothing more than a guy who loved to bowl in the wee hours of
the morning.”
“But the dream continued, like it
was pleading with me to do something. I
couldn’t call police with a hunch; they would think I was like that old nosey Mrs. Kravitz. I knew that every night at
about 3:30, I’d wake from the dream and The Teeth would be leaving his house.
So I thought what if I called the police a few minutes before he left, and told
them that a suspicious man, fitting The Teeth’s description, was breaking into his
apartment. Maybe they would come and catch him in the middle of whatever it was
he was doing.”
Saying it out loud made Max feel
crazy, and it didn’t help that Lou asked, “But Max, what if he was innocent?”
“I knew I was taking a chance, but
I had hunch, and I kept seeing the face of that red headed woman -I just
couldn’t ignore it. The dream kept changing, finally settling on a scenario
where I’m standing in front of the peach colored house where Baby Annie lived.
I walked into what looked like an old-fashioned sitting room, and standing in
the corner is the woman with the red hair and yellow blouse. She’s talking to
someone, she’s upset, and her arms are flailing wildly as she yells at this
unseen person. Red head turns and looks at me, says help, then blood begins to
appear on the front of the blouse. I wake up to the sound of my alarm -it’s
3am- time to put my pathetic plan into action.”
Lou can barely put food in her
mouth, but she’s tough and keeps right on eating; watching Max as if she were
the feature film they came to see.
“I call the police hoping that they
would arrive at the same time The Teeth was leaving his apartment. But a little
after 3 this large Black man, maybe in his 50s, shows up at the Teeth’s door.
He looks nervous, glances around as if he doesn’t want anyone to see him. When I
get a glimpse of his face, he looks familiar but I can’t place where I had seen
him. The Teeth opens the door, the two speak briefly and the man quickly enters.”
Lou is on the edge of her seat,
eating faster with each word Max spoke.
“Like clockwork, at 3:30 The Teeth
leaves with his usual bag stuffed, and the Black guy in tow, carrying a larger
bag. I thought the police wouldn’t make it, but just as the two headed down the
path to the front gate, the officers showed up. The large Black man nearly bolted
but The Teeth held him back. They begin speaking to the officers, and both men
look incredibly nervous.”
Max paused for a few moments to
glance back at the usher, who was in a peaceful and drooling slumber.
“The Black guy suddenly drops his
bag and runs, one of the officers went quickly after him, while officer 1
turned to cuff The Teeth, who was trying to escape in the other direction. The
officer opened the brown patchwork bag, and immediately looked like he might
throw up. Just then the other officer returned with the handcuffed older man in
tow, and sat him next to Teeth on the stoop. When he looked in the bag his
reaction was less dramatic, but he turned away pretty quickly from whatever was
in there.”
“Are you going to tell me what was
in that bag or not?” Lou asked, even though she had some idea.
Max didn’t answer, she just continued
with her story.
“One of the officers phoned for
backup, and when the detectives and the CSI unit showed up, they took The Teeth
and his buddy into custody.”
Both women fell silent -but the
story wasn’t over yet. Lou looked back at the usher, now softly snoring, than
looked back at Max.
“The Teeth’s real name is Daryl
Bryant.” Max said in a detached voice. “He worked as some kind of IT guy at his
family’s law firm and had a crush on a young intern named Stephanie Meyer -she
had red hair and was last seen wearing a yellow blouse and jeans.” After
hearing this, Lou dropped her last nacho.
“Daryl picked out the duplex across
from mine specifically because it had a private back entrance into a storage
space just off the kitchen. He kidnapped Miss Meyer one night just outside her
apartment and brought her to his place through that back entrance. There was
some kind of struggle and she was killed. But The Teeth didn’t have very good
luck with women or with murder, because the next day the landlord had a
building inspector tell him that The Teeth’s back entrance had to be sealed because
the door wasn’t up to code. Mr. Sanford boarded it up until he could get
someone to come out and seal it permanently.”
The theater was eerily quiet and
Max hesitated, making sure no one else was in the place listening.
She went on. “This meant that The
Teeth had to speed up his plans to get her body out of his apartment before the
workers came to seal up the doorway. It was at this is time that the dream came
back and his late night excursions began. The bastard dismembered Stephanie’s
body and began taking it out piece by piece right through his front door in
that hideous bag of his.”
“So who was the Black man that
showed up that last night?” Lou asked. It seemed her food supply had finally
exhausted.
“His name is Earl Lincoln, a maintenance
man at the Bryant’s law firm, and a close friend of the family for many years. With
time running out, Daryl called him to help move the rest of Stephanie’s body.”
“Just so you know, if you ever ask
me to help you move a dead body, you can forget it.” Lou said, shaking a red
licorice vine in the direction of Max.
“The landlord came by earlier in
the evening to tell The Teeth that workers would be by the following day to
seal the back entrance. Still, I wondered why Earl would help The Teeth dispose
of a body, and why he looked so familiar.” Max tried to sound matter-of-factly
as she continued. “Then I found out why, Earl was the father, or so he thought,
of baby Annie.”
Lou was stunned, but not enough to
stop eating her licorice.
“Daryl often came by the Lincoln house to play
with some of the older kids and was there the day Annie died. He admitted to
helping Earl hide Annie’s body, but says he had nothing to do with her death. Seems
Old Earl didn’t want to be the father of another man’s baby, so he killed her
one afternoon when his wife was out, and buried the body in their yard. When Annie’s
mother found out, she felt that Annie’s death was on her hands because of her
infidelity, so she confessed to the crime.”
The friends were silent again. “I
can’t believe it, I’m gone for 2 weeks and I miss all of this.” Lou said,
trying to make the mood a bit lighter.
“That’ll teach you to take a
vacation.” Max said.
Silence again.
“So, are you okay?”
“Yeah, I’m fine.”
The two friends sat mulling things
over.
Finally Lou blurts out, “Hey,
when’s this movie gonna start?”
“We’re early dude; it’s just you,
me and the usher.”
Lou pulled out a bag of gummy
bears, and offered one to Max.
“What’re we watching anyway?” Lou
asks.
Max smiles and says, “It’s called Henry, Portrait of a Serial Killer.”
“Oh” Lou says, nonplussed. “I hope
it starts soon.”
“Me too” Max says, “Me too.”
The End
I
hope whoever read this short story enjoyed it; I plan on posting more of my
original short stories in the future. Thanks again.
Alice from The Block

Enjoyed it very much! I love how you interspersed the crime drama with the comedy involving Lou's snacking. When Max "showed her appreciation in the only way she knew how, by giving Lou her nachos," and Lou scolding Max by wagging a licorice stick at her were masterful strokes!
ReplyDeleteBy the way, when I discovered that the women were waiting to see "Henry, Portrait of a Serial Killer," I swear I could feel the ghost of some old Barbecue chips and Grape soda threatening to come up on me!
Thanks for the entertainment! :)
Thank you Sean, so glad you enjoyed it! There will be more to come... Henry Portrait of a Serial Killer, is one of the creepiest movies I've ever seen.
DeleteTake care fellow judge :)